Wednesday is my busiest day among weekdays. Tired and exhausted, people are tend to make ridiculous mistakes. This Wednesday, I just made a mistake that bothered me a lot. On that day, I had ECE lab at 11 o'clock and this lab did not end until 2 o'clock. However, I had chemistry discussion at 3 o'clock and we had a quiz in that discussion section. Unfortunately, the lab had so many assignments that we couldn't finish all the tasks. I spent the very last minute to finish my lab report and considered rushing to my chemistry discussion. Ironically, after I finished my chemistry class, I found out that I haven't handed in my lab report to my TA.
Claim: I will ask my TA whether I could turn in my report tomorrow.
Grounds: As I was considering my chemistry discussion, I forgot to hand in my lab report at right end of the lab.
Warrants: I don't want to lose points in ECE lab.
Backing: ECE lab grade makes up 40% in our final grade, so each lab is really important. The performance in lab will affect the final grade a lot.
Qualifier: My TA will possibly allow me to turn in my lab report tomorrow.
I think this could have been modelled better if you stated it all as an argument. The grounds you gave are more of a somewhat irrelevant truth statement than an argument, unless you use it as grounds to convince your TA to accept your lab.
回复删除Your warrant isn't very argumentative, either. I personally would have worded it as something along the lines of, "I shouldn't be penalized (so harshly) for forgetting to submit my lab when I tried my best to finish it."
Your backing, if combined with my previous suggestions for your claim, grounds, and warrant, would be fine as it is.
Your qualifier works with your current claim, but with the changes I suggested, it could've been something about how not all students who hand their work in late have intentions to cheat.
I think that the grounds needs to have more of concrete facts to validate this argument, because at the moment it feels like the grounds is un-provable/un-explainable. Like why everyone else was able to but you werent.
回复删除Looking at this use at the Toulmin model I felt that you have written more of a storyline than a problem and a path to its solution. Therefore I believe you should do as follows you can leave the claim and the qualifier as is if you change the grounds to something like I need to turn in my lab report then follow on to the warrant and backing.
回复删除Akbar
i think that your grounds have some kind of problem. It is like you are already providing a cause and effect in your grounds. You are supposed to split it apart to let grounds be a reason of the claim.
回复删除Your other part of the model works well. It makes sense to me.
Bo